Are you actually planning on a restriction in the bend between the two tubular cardboard sections? If so, why? It is recommended to make the bends in the core sharp for beneficial turbulence which causes good mixing.
The burn tunnel is typically made square rather than round for better fuel exposure to air; coals on the floor are not bunched up and smothering the bottom ones.
Do you have a plan for getting the form out after casting? If it is all paper or
wood, it can burn out as long as there is an initial channel for draft, but you don't want any plastic in there.
What dimensions are you planning for all the elements?