a new idea for the bootcamp

paul wheaton wrote:I have fiddled with the text a bit

The permaculture bootcamp is a bit like a shitty school. A person would come to this school and spend their days gardening, natural building, homesteading, etc. and after four years, they can coast in their own permaculture paradise.

Personally, I would change these lines.  Rather than a shitty school, it sounds like an absolutely awesome school, the kind of school I think most permie-type people wish they had attended, rather than the one they actually went to.  In addition, I would focus the second sentence on the learning, more than just the work.  I think that could be done by just changing a few words.  Maybe "A person would come to this school and spend their days gardening, learning different types of natural building, homesteading..."

I think that could be done by just changing a few words.  Maybe "A person would come to this school and spend their days gardening, learning different types of natural building, homesteading..."

Maybe "A person would come to this school and spend their days experiencing gardening, natural building, homesteading..."

-- a little shorter ...

Rather than a shitty school, it sounds like an absolutely awesome school, the kind of school I think most permie-type people wish they had attended, rather than the one they actually went to.  

I think **I** say "shitty school" and you can comment on the thread and say your bit about the kind of school.   I have concerns that if I say it is anything other than a shitty school, then I could have people here trying to tell me how I have to do things in a different way (generally to their standards rather than my standards) to qualify as "good" or "great".  

the thread is up/started ...  i wanna add more images today ...

please add delightful questions and comments

https://permies.com/t/267198/turnkey-permaculture-paradise-monies

i'm gonna lock this thread now, cuz it is outdated.